Thanks, and sorry if it got kind of long. I've never done a workshop before and the information is good but it's kind of tedious.

I love that example that you used above!


I know that I have a hard time with run on sentences and fragments/commas still, but when it comes down to it I think a good majority of the est reviewers here on Eden do a real good job.

I'm glad I'm never going into teaching! That shit was hard. lol less

Thanks, and sorry if it got kind of long. I've never done a workshop before and the information is good but it's kind of tedious.

I love that example that you used above!


I know that I have a hard time with run on sentences and fragments/commas still, but when it comes down to it I think a good majority of the est reviewers here on Eden do a real good job.

I'm glad I'm never going into teaching! That shit was hard. lol less

Run on Sentences and Fragments

Fragment Sentences

A complete sentence will have at least one subject and one verb. Sentences are considered fragments when they are missing either a subject or a verb. Consider the following two fragment sentences and their corrected versions:

No Subject: Went to the store to buy brownie mix.
Added Subject: My dad went to the store to buy brownie mix.

No Verb: Brownie mix at the store expensive.
Added Verb: Brownie mix at the store was expensive.

In addition to containing a subject and verb, a complete sentence will express a complete thought. Consider the following two sentences and their revised versions.

Incomplete: When he went to the checkout counter to pay for the brownie mix.
Complete: When he went to the checkout counter to pay for the brownie mix, he got distracted by a display of cake mixes.

Incomplete: The variety of yummy cake mixes.
Complete: The variety of yummy cake mixes convinced him that he’d rather bake a cake than brownies tonight.



Run-On Sentences (Run-Ons)

A run-on sentence occurs when two or more independent clauses are combined without correct punctuation. An independent clause is a complete, simple sentence, meaning that it contains a subject, a verb, and a complete thought. There are a few ways to correct run-on sentences. Consider the following run-on sentence and the following options for revising it.

Run-On: The grocery store was really packed with people there must have been a big sale today.

Correction 1: The grocery store was really packed with people. There must have been a big sale today.

Here, the error has been corrected by simply breaking the run-on sentence into two sentences.

Correction 2: The grocery store was really packed with people, so there must have been a big sale today.

In this case, the sentence has been corrected by adding a coordinating conjunction and a comma. This is a compound sentence.

Correction 3: Because the grocery store was really packed with people, there must have been a big sale.

In this example, the sentence has been corrected by adding a subordinating conjunction and a comma. This is a complex sentence.




Run-On Sentence Exercises

Some of the sentences below are run-ons. Play editor on the sentences. Could you tell these writers why the run-ons are incorrect? Also, how would you tell the writers to fix them?

We were really busy at the restaurant tonight. I waited tables straight through from 3:30 to 11:30 I never sat down for even one break.
My dog had to go to the vet today. She cried and cried when the clipped her toenails, but then she was fine when they gave her a shot!
The book we had to read for class was really long my teacher doesn’t seem to understand that we have other classes to read for too.


*If you click on any of the OWL links you will find exercises at the bottom of the pages* less

silicon or silicone?

If it’s the super-hygienic sex toy material that so many love, it’s silicone. If it’s the semi-conductive chemical element that is a major component of sand, it’s silicon. (Chances are, if seen in a review, it’s silicone.)

lay or lie?

You lay down a book, but lie down on the bed. You lay in bed for hours, while the book laid on the desktop.

sit
Noun: A period of sitting: "a sit in the shade".
Verb: Adopt or be in a position in which one's weight is supported by one's buttocks rather than one's feet and one's back is upright: "you'd better sit down

set
Noun: A group or collection of things that belong together or resemble one another or are usually found together: "a set of false teeth".
Verb: Put, lay, or stand (something) in a specified place or position: "Dana set the mug of tea down". less

I know as I'm testing something out, I'm always asking "What do I have to say about this that hasn't been said before?" and "What really makes this product different from others that someone might be looking at?"

Really? Good heavens, I focus on getting-off. The details come during the postmortem. less