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#EdenLit - Club Meeting - May 14, 2012 @7pm EST

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Contributor: Lickable Lollie Lickable Lollie
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Now some fun and then some lessons! Our subject was five words: Did you all nearly pee yourselves when you read Destri's take on the subject in "The real Miss Piggy?"
It was so vivid it was almost uncomfortable to read! Very well done.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Ok now I KNOW who is going to teach our poem lessons....

Awws! Anytime! I'm totally humbled and grateful and flattered! I have a HUGE case of the warm fuzzies coming on and my face really is red irl, btw. I've been writing poetry for 26 yrs now so I hope I know a little bit about it. It's my life's passion, my raison d'etre.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
At this time I will award the first $25 GC to Delicious B for her first meeting! Congoratz...and welcome.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Ansley Ansley
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Originally posted by Lickable Lollie
It was so vivid it was almost uncomfortable to read! Very well done.
Agreed!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
Ok!!!! I am here! I honestly am!!!

Sorry, I promised I'd get a blog post out this morning so been trying to do both read here and write there.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
At this time I will award the first $25 GC to Delicious B for her first meeting! Congoratz...and welcome.
Congrats Delicious B!!!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Lickable Lollie Lickable Lollie
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
At this time I will award the first $25 GC to Delicious B for her first meeting! Congoratz...and welcome.
Congrats!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica

Awws! Anytime! I'm totally humbled and grateful and flattered! I have a HUGE case of the warm fuzzies coming on and my face really is red irl, btw. I've been writing poetry for 26 yrs now so I hope I know a little bit about it. ... more
Psssst, Stormy are you seeing guest speaker potential here??
05/14/2012
Contributor: DeliciousB DeliciousB
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
At this time I will award the first $25 GC to Delicious B for her first meeting! Congoratz...and welcome.
Awww. Thanks but this lesson was much more rewarding. I learned a lot. Next meeting here I come.
05/14/2012
Contributor: ScarletFox ScarletFox
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
At this time I will award the first $25 GC to Delicious B for her first meeting! Congoratz...and welcome.
Congratulations!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Ansley Ansley
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Psssst, Stormy are you seeing guest speaker potential here??
*nods emphatically*
05/14/2012
Contributor: Ansley Ansley
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Originally posted by DeliciousB
Awww. Thanks but this lesson was much more rewarding. I learned a lot. Next meeting here I come.
Congrats!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
My little poem was written after a rainstorm when I found my Son's stuffed zebra sitting by the garden fence looking so damn hopeful and forlorn at the same time. I added a Miss Piggy and Voila! It was born "The Watcher"
05/14/2012
Contributor: DeliciousB DeliciousB
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Originally posted by Woman China
Congrats Delicious B!!!
Thank you!
05/14/2012
Contributor: DeliciousB DeliciousB
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Originally posted by Ansley
Congrats!
Thanks!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Ansley
*nods emphatically*
gooood gooood *rubs hands together like an evil scientist
05/14/2012
Contributor: Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Great point! It can be trickier to write a short story because you don't really have time to write reams of back story. It can also be freeing as well, you know it is just a blip so it can be a bit more vague and even dreamlike.
It helps me to do a lot of character development exercises. The silly questionaires, ofc, but I also do things like write a pg or two about the look, vibe, appearance of a character's car - it's smell, feel, how the engine run's, if the breaks squeel, how the character drives, their relationship to the car, what are the little quirky details that lets you know the cars that particular character's. The more of that type of stuff I do for each of the main characters, the less I have to do when I actually begin the story because it just pours out of me. I am Henry Higgins and have created my own Eliza Doolittles and I know them better than I know myself. Therefore, their actions and dialogue just flow like a mountain brook.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
It helps me to do a lot of character development exercises. The silly questionaires, ofc, but I also do things like write a pg or two about the look, vibe, appearance of a character's car - it's smell, feel, how the engine run's, if the ... more
that would be an interesting task assignment... a character development story.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
It helps me to do a lot of character development exercises. The silly questionaires, ofc, but I also do things like write a pg or two about the look, vibe, appearance of a character's car - it's smell, feel, how the engine run's, if the ... more
That's an excellent exercise as it also lets you see what your reader MUST see...they are blind, deaf and sensory blind poor dears
05/14/2012
Contributor: Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Cedarlooman
If anyone would be interested in pre-posting feedback and/or grammar and editing suggestions (I will leave out female perspective ideas ), feel free to contact me on here.

Enjoy the rest of the evening ladies. I will do some reading in the ... more
I would most definitely be interested and I'm more than willing (would relish the distraction from my own "work," actually), to edit/critique/give feedback/copyedit/what ever anyone needs done.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Woman China
that would be an interesting task assignment... a character development story.
Or an exercise in describing something in minute detail? A character introduced as though they were meeting the reader for the very first time?
05/14/2012
Contributor: Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Ansley
Airen, the only trouble I had with your story was the name Carolana. It just didn't roll off my tongue naturally, but that's more nitpicky than helpful.
I'm with you on that. It seems like a bit of a bastardization of "Carolina" and being a North Carolinian, it kinda stuck in my craw a bit, like a bug bite you can't reach yrself.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Or were you thinking more of a show how your characters come to life sort of thing?
05/14/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Or an exercise in describing something in minute detail? A character introduced as though they were meeting the reader for the very first time?
Could work... is your brain hamster running in his wheel? I know Harold is on crack with this idea!!!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Lickable Lollie Lickable Lollie
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
Or an exercise in describing something in minute detail? A character introduced as though they were meeting the reader for the very first time?
I really like that idea!
05/14/2012
Contributor: Kake aka PoeticErotica Kake aka PoeticErotica
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Originally posted by Ansley
I just keep thinking of Carol Anne from the Poltergeist movie.
Oooh, I dig! Much better! Also, leaves way for myriads of nicknames.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
I'm with you on that. It seems like a bit of a bastardization of "Carolina" and being a North Carolinian, it kinda stuck in my craw a bit, like a bug bite you can't reach yrself.
Naw it was a shortened form of a longer name...which should have been explained. like Arri being short for Aline. When the two met they couldn't speak the same language and the names got sort of butchered sort of thing
05/14/2012
Contributor: Ansley Ansley
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Originally posted by Kake aka PoeticErotica
Oooh, I dig! Much better! Also, leaves way for myriads of nicknames.
It's a mystical creature though, so I think something more ethereal would be the way to go.
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Woman China
Could work... is your brain hamster running in his wheel? I know Harold is on crack with this idea!!!
Ok then should that be our topic this month? Not the fun one the lesson one LOL
05/14/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Ansley
It's a mystical creature though, so I think something more ethereal would be the way to go.
I will change her name or explain it this Month as the lesson topic
05/14/2012