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#EdenLit - Club Meeting - May 14, 2012 @7pm EST
05/14/2012
Little Spoon....that story touched me and was a pretty damn fine example of Third person perspective. Do you think our main char learned to let go of expectations, or did the two of them come together and learn about seeing things from their partner's eyes?
05/14/2012
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I love when she teases.... she's very good at it!!
Originally posted by
Ansley
Sounds fantastic to me! I'm excited about it, you've been teasing me all day!
Just so you all know... if I suddenly poof!!! my internet is being a wee bit wonky this morning.
05/14/2012
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Hey there man! So how is tax season progressing or is that finally over for you?
Originally posted by
Cedarlooman
Hello ladies!
05/14/2012
I must admit that with Finals and everything else going on I have neither written nor read the wonderful prose submitted this month.
05/14/2012
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I think she let go of needing constant reassurance. The signs that he loved her were there all along. She just chose to ignore them.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
Little Spoon....that story touched me and was a pretty damn fine example of Third person perspective. Do you think our main char learned to let go of expectations, or did the two of them come together and learn about seeing things from their
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Little Spoon....that story touched me and was a pretty damn fine example of Third person perspective. Do you think our main char learned to let go of expectations, or did the two of them come together and learn about seeing things from their partner's eyes?
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05/14/2012
I can say from experience, we are still learning how to see things from each other's eyes.
05/14/2012
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S'ok take a minute and scan it over if you need to. It's worth it!
Originally posted by
Cedarlooman
I must admit that with Finals and everything else going on I have neither written nor read the wonderful prose submitted this month.
05/14/2012
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The whole actions speak louder than words. I saw that as well.
Originally posted by
Ansley
I think she let go of needing constant reassurance. The signs that he loved her were there all along. She just chose to ignore them.
05/14/2012
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I was thinking the same thing and also that perhaps he learned that sometimes showy lovemaking is kinda necessary even if it shouldn't always be!
Originally posted by
Ansley
I think she let go of needing constant reassurance. The signs that he loved her were there all along. She just chose to ignore them.
05/14/2012
I think she came to an understanding. That he shows his love in a different way.
05/14/2012
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A happy writer is one who writes from experience. Did you find yourself tempted to shy away from the pain of remembering what happened? Did you find that you wanted to sort of soften the ragged edges, so to speak?
Originally posted by
Lickable Lollie
I can say from experience, we are still learning how to see things from each other's eyes.
05/14/2012
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No, honestly I think I write better when I'm hurt...so I sorta reopened the wounds to write from my heart. It was easy to do since it was a recent event for me.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
A happy writer is one who writes from experience. Did you find yourself tempted to shy away from the pain of remembering what happened? Did you find that you wanted to sort of soften the ragged edges, so to speak?
05/14/2012
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Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
Originally posted by
DeliciousB
I think she came to an understanding. That he shows his love in a different way.
Question for the author: Did you want to imply a sense of hope or helplessness at the end of your story?
05/14/2012
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Definitely hope.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
Question for the author: Did you want to imply a sense of hope or helplessness at the end of your story?
Question for the author: Did you want to imply a sense of hope or helplessness at the end of your story?
05/14/2012
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Yes! Yes! I felt that their love what starting to build a much deeper bond. The kind were words could never express.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
Question for the author: Did you want to imply a sense of hope or helplessness at the end of your story?
Question for the author: Did you want to imply a sense of hope or helplessness at the end of your story?
05/14/2012
"Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't.
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't.
05/14/2012
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Ahhhhh good point! I wanted to ask because sometimes we forget that we dont HAVE to write everything down just as it happened. Sometimes a story can take us outside of our pain and lead to enlightenment...or just to a damn fine story. I want to be sure our writers know they can take liberties like this without guilt.
Originally posted by
Lickable Lollie
No, honestly I think I write better when I'm hurt...so I sorta reopened the wounds to write from my heart. It was easy to do since it was a recent event for me.
As it was that was an amazing piece of innocence and hope I have read in a long time.
05/14/2012
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Don't worry about talking about me like I'm not here; I understand why.
Originally posted by
Ansley
"Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you ... more
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you ... more
"Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't. less
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't. less
05/14/2012
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I'm glad I'm here tonight, Airen. I really needed someone to give me permission to use that license. I've spent years going, okay was it this year that so and so did this and that was the cause of this or did it all happen within days of each other...no wait, I was here, oh fuck it. And just toss the whole thing aside, frustrated for not being able to remember it all.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
Ahhhhh good point! I wanted to ask because sometimes we forget that we dont HAVE to write everything down just as it happened. Sometimes a story can take us outside of our pain and lead to enlightenment...or just to a damn fine story. I want to be
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more
Ahhhhh good point! I wanted to ask because sometimes we forget that we dont HAVE to write everything down just as it happened. Sometimes a story can take us outside of our pain and lead to enlightenment...or just to a damn fine story. I want to be sure our writers know they can take liberties like this without guilt.
As it was that was an amazing piece of innocence and hope I have read in a long time. less
As it was that was an amazing piece of innocence and hope I have read in a long time. less
I was living it, I wasn't thinking about remembering it at the time.
05/14/2012
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When I read it, I felt like she had past that turning point from a girl-like relationship to a more mature and deeper relationship that went beyond just words.
Originally posted by
Ansley
"Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you ... more
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you ... more
"Did you leave the story with a feeling like this is a couple who are deepening their relationship?
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't. less
At the end of it, I felt like she had reached a turning point in her thought process on relationships and that (sorry to talk about you like you aren't here, but it helps to critique the piece) there was a lot of learning left to do, that it was a very new territory for both people and that depending on how they chose to react to perceived slights and imperfections that they were going to be able to make it through things a lot of couples wouldn't. less
05/14/2012
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Well then Bravo! You did an excellent job. I was able to suspend disbelief and see myself as I was when I was in the same situation. Since my situation turned out to be amazing I was left feeling very hopeful and happy for the character. It will be interesting to see if someone else might not use their life experience and arrive at a different feeling.
Originally posted by
Lickable Lollie
Definitely hope.
05/14/2012
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I did some editing from what really happened just because it wasn't all that interesting in real life, but the general idea is the same.
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
Ahhhhh good point! I wanted to ask because sometimes we forget that we dont HAVE to write everything down just as it happened. Sometimes a story can take us outside of our pain and lead to enlightenment...or just to a damn fine story. I want to be
...
more
Ahhhhh good point! I wanted to ask because sometimes we forget that we dont HAVE to write everything down just as it happened. Sometimes a story can take us outside of our pain and lead to enlightenment...or just to a damn fine story. I want to be sure our writers know they can take liberties like this without guilt.
As it was that was an amazing piece of innocence and hope I have read in a long time. less
As it was that was an amazing piece of innocence and hope I have read in a long time. less
05/14/2012
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Maybe, but I admit I have a little more insight into the author's background than you might. She was a student of mine (and a damn fine one at that).
Originally posted by
Woman China
When I read it, I felt like she had past that turning point from a girl-like relationship to a more mature and deeper relationship that went beyond just words.
05/14/2012
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Aw, thanks Stormy
Originally posted by
Ansley
Maybe, but I admit I have a little more insight into the author's background than you might. She was a student of mine (and a damn fine one at that).
05/14/2012
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Good point. We have poetic license to use the past to illustrate our point as writers. That is the beauty of third person...the author is omniscient we KNOW what happened how we arrive at that point is about choice.
Originally posted by
Ansley
I'm glad I'm here tonight, Airen. I really needed someone to give me permission to use that license. I've spent years going, okay was it this year that so and so did this and that was the cause of this or did it all happen within days of
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more
I'm glad I'm here tonight, Airen. I really needed someone to give me permission to use that license. I've spent years going, okay was it this year that so and so did this and that was the cause of this or did it all happen within days of each other...no wait, I was here, oh fuck it. And just toss the whole thing aside, frustrated for not being able to remember it all.
I was living it, I wasn't thinking about remembering it at the time. less
I was living it, I wasn't thinking about remembering it at the time. less
05/14/2012
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There again is a good point. What point is too much information revealed? DO we have permission to say "this is what I wished I had said" and have it be accepted?
Originally posted by
Ansley
Maybe, but I admit I have a little more insight into the author's background than you might. She was a student of mine (and a damn fine one at that).
05/14/2012
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It was my pleasure. But, I think this is her first "big-girl" step and she's a little scared and so she was looking at the wrong signals, when all of a sudden it clicked. She's gotta couple more things to experience that are gonna knock her socks off.
Originally posted by
Lickable Lollie
Aw, thanks Stormy
05/14/2012
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Never fear Lollie, I just bought new socks. You can have a pair or two you can borrow if you loose yours along the way!!!
Originally posted by
Ansley
It was my pleasure. But, I think this is her first "big-girl" step and she's a little scared and so she was looking at the wrong signals, when all of a sudden it clicked. She's gotta couple more things to experience that are gonna
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It was my pleasure. But, I think this is her first "big-girl" step and she's a little scared and so she was looking at the wrong signals, when all of a sudden it clicked. She's gotta couple more things to experience that are gonna knock her socks off.
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05/14/2012
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Man, had I gone into complete detail of everything leading up to that point, it would have been a book... *ponders*
Originally posted by
Airen Wolf
There again is a good point. What point is too much information revealed? DO we have permission to say "this is what I wished I had said" and have it be accepted?
05/14/2012