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#EdenLit - March Meeting 3/12/2012 @7pm EST

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Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Destri
(I have returned from being kicked right off the site) I do get it, I think. And it seems HARD! You are a cruel taskmistress, Airen!
Mhmmm but it's fun, no?

Second person narrative allows you to direct the scene in a much more personal and forceful manner BUT it doesn't allow any thought or description FROM your audience, you have to describe everything for them.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Jul!a Jul!a
Ok my lovely Edenites, I'm being told that dinner has been prepared and that I must go eat. I've had a blast chatting with you all tonight and I look forward to one day being more active with my participation!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
You stood there and slowly removed your glasses and all that noticed was that your eyes looked even bigger without your glasses on.

Is that second person?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
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Originally posted by Jul!a
Ok my lovely Edenites, I'm being told that dinner has been prepared and that I must go eat. I've had a blast chatting with you all tonight and I look forward to one day being more active with my participation!
bye bye! Have a great night!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Cedarlooman
The question begs to be answered. Poking hardcore...does that mean hardcore scene or just hard pkoing. I am sure there are some aids laying around to help with the first.
I ahve at least two "aides" who wouldn't mind poking Sam hardcore....OMG STOP This is getting too bad
03/12/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
This months assignment? Poke, Sam, Mister T, face mask, fresh mints aaaaaaaaannnnnnnnd go!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Woman China
You stood there and slowly removed your glasses and all that noticed was that your eyes looked even bigger without your glasses on.

Is that second person?
Yes but it would be more like: You stood there, do you remember? You slowly removed your glasses and everyone noticed that your eyes looked even bigger without your glasses on.

The reason is you are presenting a memory but you have to TELL your audience that it is a memory. Does that make sense?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Woman China
This months assignment? Poke, Sam, Mister T, face mask, fresh mints aaaaaaaaannnnnnnnd go!
HOLY COW that would be totally WRONG in second person narrative!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Quote:
Originally posted by Destri
(I have returned from being kicked right off the site) I do get it, I think. And it seems HARD! You are a cruel taskmistress, Airen!
It is very difficult. I have one of these somewhere ( I don't ktnow if it was. Ended posted as part of the book choices or not). It was a challenge to myself and really did make me stop and think while writing. It ended up being one of.my shortest stories because I couldn't flesh it out with multiple perspectives.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
HOLY COW that would be totally WRONG in second person narrative!
'Remember when you watched Mr. T poke Sam hardcore while wearing his face mask and how it made you sweat?' LOL
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
HOLY COW that would be totally WRONG in second person narrative!
HOWEVER it does fit the topic I chose earlier LOL:

This Month we will try to write a narrative using second person viewpoint. Let's begin with a series of three to four objects chosen at random and then allow the authors to combine these "ingredients" in a second person narrative. I need a short list of two to three common objects or situations and a product sold here at EF.

So we need 2-3 objects/situations and a product sold here.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Quote:
Originally posted by Jul!a
Ok my lovely Edenites, I'm being told that dinner has been prepared and that I must go eat. I've had a blast chatting with you all tonight and I look forward to one day being more active with my participation!
Enjoy! And we look forward to seeing you around here more.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
HOWEVER it does fit the topic I chose earlier LOL:

This Month we will try to write a narrative using second person viewpoint. Let's begin with a series of three to four objects chosen at random and then allow the authors to combine these ... more
a vase of roses, a party and a vibrator???
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Woman China
This months assignment? Poke, Sam, Mister T, face mask, fresh mints aaaaaaaaannnnnnnnd go!
Sam, you vixen! I saw you take off the face mask and your breath smells like fresh mints. Did you poke Mr. T or were you thinking it would be better to take off the face mask first?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
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Originally posted by Destri
a vase of roses, a party and a vibrator???
ooooh good suggestions! What vibrator?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Dammit ladies! I'm at work and I am getting near to blushing. What a pack of pervs. Lol. Of course it would help if I wasn't adding to it with.mental images and additional paragraphs.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
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Originally posted by Airen Wolf
ooooh good suggestions! What vibrator?
Bah! I knew you were going to ask that! How about the fifi?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
Quote:
Originally posted by Destri
Bah! I knew you were going to ask that! How about the fifi?
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03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Cedarlooman
Dammit ladies! I'm at work and I am getting near to blushing. What a pack of pervs. Lol. Of course it would help if I wasn't adding to it with.mental images and additional paragraphs.
LOL we have returned the favor then We are writers...perversion goes withthe territory. You know what they say...the unwritten story is always more graphic and arousing >
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Destri
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How very spring like! Done and done!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
Quote:
Originally posted by Cedarlooman
Dammit ladies! I'm at work and I am getting near to blushing. What a pack of pervs. Lol. Of course it would help if I wasn't adding to it with.mental images and additional paragraphs.
Hey, we are not responsible for your excellent imagination skillsd!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Woman is having holy hell with her rotating 'hide me from the Chinese idiots' software. She can see but not respond at the moment.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
No Fifi!!! What about the UFO? or the Fou?

Much more interesting names. But then again... could always make Fifi the puppy ferret's name with the funny rabbit tail.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Quote:
Originally posted by Airen Wolf
ooooh good suggestions! What vibrator?
I don't know. It seems.a.little too easy. What I liked about the. earlier one when I read them was how.the topics totally didn't go.together. these three are like every Valentine for me. oh, which reminds me...don't forget what tomorrow is ladies. Haha
03/12/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
It is life Behind the Wall!!! I am in Indonesia at the moment and not stable!!!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Destri Destri
Quote:
Originally posted by Cedarlooman
I don't know. It seems.a.little too easy. What I liked about the. earlier one when I read them was how.the topics totally didn't go.together. these three are like every Valentine for me. oh, which reminds me...don't forget what tomorrow ... more
What is tomorrow???
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Ok we have our EdenFantasys Topic O' the Month and our Lesson topic is:

Write a second person perspective involving a vase of roses, a party and a Fifi
Do we want to add any other variables?
03/12/2012
Contributor: Cedarlooman Cedarlooman
Quote:
Originally posted by Cedarlooman
I don't know. It seems.a.little too easy. What I liked about the. earlier one when I read them was how.the topics totally didn't go.together. these three are like every Valentine for me. oh, which reminds me...don't forget what tomorrow ... more
Oops I meant Wednesday!
03/12/2012
Contributor: Woman China Woman China
I think penis shaped gummies, nipple clamps, a Liberator ramp.
03/12/2012
Contributor: Airen Wolf Airen Wolf
(EF Review Program Mentor)
Quote:
Originally posted by Woman China
No Fifi!!! What about the UFO? or the Fou?

Much more interesting names. But then again... could always make Fifi the puppy ferret's name with the funny rabbit tail.
Or the subbie name!
03/12/2012