Ok I just read over the Love at Snow Lake thinking I would find it wasn't quite as good as I remembered it the first time....IT IS!!! WOW
What a sweet, tender, warm and well described story. Welcome to our club Passionatelover2 and PLEASE keep writing!
I love that our guys show such tender devotion to setting their scenes and not just wrecklessly plowing into the middle of such a small part of the whole. Each part of Snow Lake is redolent with warmth and firelight....very nice! less

It is what I like about having some of the set topics.

Like Mimi (I think it is Mimi!!!) her blog post about chocolates. Made me think of a "Chocolate Virgin" where Silverdrops story made me think of wanton lust for sex dipped in chocolate.

And now I think I am going to the store this afternoon for chocolate. less

Ok several Month's back the club members began wondering if there was a way for us to possibly elevate the meetings from just a gather and talk about what we had written.
I would like to start doing just that this Month. I have prepared a bit of a refresher about Narrative perspective and I thought we would focus on First person narrative to begin with.

First person storytelling- In a first person narrative the narrator is telling the story from their personal perspective. Usually they are recounting a memory or account of a previous happening, though they could also be telling the story in real time. The trick for the author is to remember to use the proper tense and to describe the events as they unfold rather than glossing over important details.
Remember that your audience cannot see, smell, hear or taste what your character is seeing, smelling, hearing or tasting. To be really effective the author must remember that actions should be described in a logical fashion. As we discussed before, when awakening groggy from being abducted it is illogical to assume that the person "Suddenly" notices they are bound. The process is gradual but the reaction can be sudden and violent. So I would become aware with a series of small tugs and flexings that I am bound and then, possibly, suddenly begin thrashing around. The point being that the logical reaction, unless the character is distracted by something else, say someone nibbling on their toes, they won't 'suddenly' realize something as monumental as being bound hand and foot. less

The narrator in a first person narration may or may not be the primary focus of the story. They may or may not be privy to the thoughts and motivations of the other characters. If you decide that your character does know intimate thoughts of other characters in the story you need to make the audience understand how and why this character knows this information. Are they guessing based on previous experience or are they truly omniscient?
When writing in first person narrative the author should use language that reflects personal perspective: 'I, or we' when referring to themselves. it is generally a mistake to switch perspectives in the middle of a story without an acknowledged break in the story. For example when using the alternating perspective the author should fully explore interaction between the characters from each of the narrators point of view before switching to present another perspective. The author should be very careful to establish just exactly who is the focal character...unless the story demands that this information be withheld from the reader. This is done with the use of chapters or simple paragraphs. If you change focal points with spoken sentences then you must begin a new paragraph beginning with the quoted work. Then you can proceed to share the perspective of this character in the first person. This is often tricky and can read as choppy and disconnected. Generally this shifting focus style of writing is coupled with the Omniscient Narrator style where the second and even the third person language is used throughout the story. less